Thursday, July 29, 2010

mag 25


some say
the eyes are the keys to the soul

i know where the key lies

the key is to see
the lies
with the eyes of my soul

swallow the key

close the I's

never to be opened

unless
picked by an
unwelcome intruder
...or blind trust

there is no key

only the i of my soul

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17 comments:

  1. Kathe W.July 30, 2010 at 1:21 AM

    the key is to see
    the lies
    with the eyes of my soul
    Lovely words

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  2. Brian MillerJuly 30, 2010 at 5:23 AM

    brilliant...such depth of wisdom...nice wordplay...great magpie!

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  3. SheriJuly 30, 2010 at 6:46 AM

    "never to be opened"...wow, never is such a long time for the soul to be locked up :( but, who am i to talk? the pain we evoke on one another can be so traumatic, enough to bring your words to pass, and understandably so! this is beautiful...poignant, and deeply final.

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  4. swputhJuly 30, 2010 at 8:12 AM

    lies, lies, eyes and i's ,,, I love the way your logical path went by keeping the words and changing there meaning... Excellent and variety writing

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  5. signed...bkmJuly 30, 2010 at 8:36 AM

    Nice twists and turns in this Magpie...bravo..bkm

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  6. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJuly 30, 2010 at 9:10 AM

    you have beautiful imaginations,
    your words fly,
    your tale sails high!

    smart one!

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  7. MartinJuly 30, 2010 at 11:26 AM

    Perceptive and cleverly written. Very nice post.

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  8. SuzJuly 30, 2010 at 4:41 PM

    I confess..I couldn't follow this one
    ..something is locked up...I guess it must be lies.

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  9. DianneJuly 30, 2010 at 6:57 PM

    Very creative... clever plays on words... wonderful symbolism....

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  10. spacedlawJuly 30, 2010 at 10:36 PM

    Someone sliced through the eyes
    By the stroke of a key.
    All the truth seeping out... Or tears.

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  11. transparentnow?July 31, 2010 at 8:36 AM

    dear suz, it's about love and betrayal. then using the defense mechanism of locking the heart away. but to continue to live and love that defense doesn't work---so there is no key. with the help of God (and a good therapist :) life reopens and love enters in again

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  12. HelenJuly 31, 2010 at 9:20 AM

    This is both complex and lovely .... beautifully done!

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  13. SheriJuly 31, 2010 at 11:05 AM

    i just finished reading your comment on my post and i am speechless!! i was looking at your profile to see if you had an email address so i could gush there but you've left me no choice but to do it right here ;)
    thank YOU, for giving me such honor!! you can't imagine what your words have done in reminding just how important it is to truly care about people, and to care about the things that hold great meaning to them!
    i'm so glad that you've found a way to turn such a beautiful and peaceful place into a whole 'nother space that brings you joy!
    much love and big (((hugs))) for bringing a smile to my heart today :)

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  14. Tess KincaidJuly 31, 2010 at 6:41 PM

    Love the play with the eyes and i's!

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  15. RAAugust 1, 2010 at 4:13 AM

    Brilliant, simply brilliant!

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  16. Tattered and LostAugust 2, 2010 at 2:03 PM

    I worry for this speaker. It almost feels like the angst of youth. Nicely done.

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  17. Tumblewords:August 2, 2010 at 7:21 PM

    Very nice - well crafted. Love the mystery and the word play.

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